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Saturday, March 20, 2021

ST17.1 Reviews and Rankings - Cybronica

First, ranks, then reviews below. I included the shadows - they're ranked with .5's to show where I would have put them were they actual submissions. 

Also I just want to say, I haven't been super active with the fights this year, so being a judge, listening to everyone singing their submissions, felt like coming home and seeing old friends. It was much needed after a year of pandemic/lockdown. I had a fun time listening to and analyzing everyone's songs; thank you all for sharing your art!

1EmKayDeeBee - Pleased to Meet You (introvert in disguise) 
2Jon Porobil - My Name Is Jon 
3Lucky Witch & the Righteous Ghost - Hello 
4Boy on the Wall (featuring Parle G Baby) - Pleasure To Meet You (I Am Your Husband) 
5Also In Blue - Pleasure To Meet You
6Regis Michelena - The Other Regis
7Night Sky - Celestial Navigation 
8Sober - Even If It's Dirt 
8.5All the Robots - All the Robots (SHADOW) 
9Melody Klein - My Name Is Melody
10Cavedwellers - Disjointed but with Porpoise 
11Keen Observer - P.O.S. 
12Vom Vorton - Forget All You Knew
13Pigfarmer Jr - Middle Age Rock Star
14Hot Pink Halo - Hot Pink Halo 
15David G Harrington - Dave Is OK 
16Good Guy Sôjàbé - Hey Sôjàbé! 
17Dented Bento - Spark Joy 
18Jealous Brother - We're Jealous Brother 
19rackwagon - We Are Rackwagon 
20Ominous Ride - The Guy Behind the Guy 
21The Brewhouse Sessions - I Am Beer
22See-Man-Ski - Let Me Introduce Myself
23Boffo Yux Dudes - Half Step Away
24Governing Dynamics - Don't Count Me Out 
25The Dutch Widows - Theme For The Dutch Widows 
26HandHammered - I Dream 
26.5Hutch - Mountain Home Blues (SHADOW) 
27Giraffes for Wings - Screed of the Toothpick Man 
28Lichen Throat - King of the Gnomes
29Menage a Tune - Mostly I'm Just Me
30Mystery Science Creator 3000 - Awakenings 
31Little Bobby Tables - I'm The One 
32Buku Chauney - About Me 
33The Wizards of Vomit - The Thing About Me Is, Who I Am 
34Yo Mammy and the Fuzznuts - Yo Mammy and the Fuzznuts 
35Declan IOM - I Am A Robot 

Pleasure to Meet You Review by Cybronica - in alphabetical order


All the Robots - This is a robot song I can get behind. I love how you use distortion! It’s so well done, and intentional. Along with the layering of synths and then the final harmonized distorted vocals, it is superb. Great listen. The lyrics are like a modified pantoum, which is really cool, and they way they fold over each other during each progressive stanza and distortion is delightful. That said, I don’t feel like I met someone and they introduced themselves, so DISQUALIFIED. Good thing you’re a shadow, huh? 


Also in Blue - Holy cow what a way to start! I LOVE the intro. Close vocal harmonies are

"These hills sing"

The string pedal tone makes sense, but grates ever so slightly the longer it goes on. Maybe if it shimmered between different octaves, different dynamics, or another timbre, it would have kept the desired effect without being overdone. It’s mainly an issue because it makes me overly aware of the same instrument in the rest of the song in a way that distracts me from enjoying the song. And boy do I like to enjoy this song. I just want to swim through your vocals. Only hitch - the high note on “away” loses control. I’m sure you can sing it to line up with the rest of your range’s tone. Regarding the challenge, this is more a song
about introductions than an actual introduction. Yet, even as I write that, I realize I’m splitting hairs. You pass!


BYD - Do you have an overzealous autotune on your vocals, or is it just a by product of the multitracked vocals? Either way, it grates a little on multiple listens, especially since the verse melody is so repetitive. I do really like when you do the chords on the oo vowel in the chorus. I think I just want less unison, more harmonies with all those vocal takes. The guitar sounds pretty low in the mix, I’d like it a little higher. The lyrics are fun; I especially like “Dulcimer tones from a Tuvan throat.” I definitely feel like you introduced yourselves, so challenge is met!


Boy on the Wall - Vocal reminds me of Pharrell Williams; so smooth, and  they’re well produced. I like the intimate, almost talky, Prince quality to how you singing, and the call backs in my right ear are a nice touch. I quite like the featured rap - she sounds great, and I loooove what she’s saying! In fact all the lyrics are well conceived and clever. I especially like “Already swept you off your feet/So pass the broom I’ll sweep the floor.”  It’s the little turns of phrase like that that make me smile. The orchestra hit miiiiight be overused. Aside from its overuse, this is a fun song. Definitely fulfills the challenge, I feel like I met someone and they introduced themselves. 


The Brewhouse Sessions - You’re a good singer, but every so often I hear something falter in the tone. I think you need a little more of yourself in the sound, and a little more surety of what youre doing vocally. I hear it (the good stuff) on the chorus, especially on “i am beer!” The unsure sound is more in the verses; its got a tightness in your throat that negatively affects the sound, imo. The song needs more melodic contrast in the verses. In the choruses where you don’t have the second “I am beer,” its absence is heavily felt. If you don’t sing it again ( which I do think was a wise choice), maybe put in another instrument doing a counter melody over the riff. Otherwise it's too abrupt. Speaking of abrupt, you can hear the c/p of tracks between the first chorus and second verse. You can avoid this by bringing the volume all the way down for the split second of the splice (not ideal, but better than the c/p jump), or have one instrument play continuously over the seam so it’s less noticeable. For best results do both. This song is too repetitive to be this long, and it is too long to be this repetitive. My rec: Give it a faster tempo to make it a pattersong, and/or (preferably and) make the melody more varied in the verse. It’s a shame because the lyrics are really clever. “The grain mill cracks me up/The hot water soothes my soul” - this kind of word play is my jam, but it is lost in the sameness of the rest of the song. This is a sister song to Brian Grey’s Keep the Yeast Alive a couple years back- they need to be on a beer playlist! Challenge: You are beer, I met you, you introduced yourself, but also gave me your life’s story. I’ve been to this cocktail party already - pass me a beer. Also you pass!

Side note: listening to this song over and over for the review made me crack open a Miller Light, so maybe check with them about getting on their marketing team?


Buku Chauney - Hard to hear the lyrics here. Everything just seems a little muffled, like I’m listening to the concert from the next room in the bar. The piano is really nice. Is that played live? It sounds like it, and I think it is the best part of the song. The overall is pretty good, but nothing to write home about. The problem is this song doesn’t stand out to me, and i want it to, because I think it’s a nice song, just hard to tell. As an introduction, this is pretty weak. You pass the challenge, but I really can’t say if I like you until I get to know you better. 


Cavedwellers - I really like how the separated syllabification of the intro is echoed (pun intended) in the echo on the guitar. Like a lot of your songs, this grows on me more and more as I listen to it. I really do need to listen to it several times to hear all the interesting bits and pieces of the instrumentals weaving together. Some might say the lyric is too esoteric to be an introduction, but as someone who’s been listening to your music for a few years now, yes, this is absolutely an introduction to who you are as a band. The porpoise line is my favorite, though it makes more sense written down than in the context of the song. 


David G Harrington - It’s not a prominent part of the texture, but the piano is what I notice most. Are you playing live or quantizing your midi? Not a value judgement either way, just curious.The piano is great, and I can totally hear it being played live on stage. Surprise slide guitar is good slide guitar. The multitracked vocals don’t quite line up in the chorus, and that bothers my ear. You put a lot of energy and feeling in your vocals in the verse, but then the chorus vocals sound very pressed to the point of being a little strained-whisper in tone. You didn’t need to pull back your tone there; in fact, I want more sound on the chorus. I realize it’s a little higher, but if you take a solid breath and trust your voice, you’ll find it’s there for you. I like the hard panned backing vocals in the bridge; it makes for a great moment. The autotune is a bit distracting the more I listen to this song. Challenge: I do feel like I know Dave now (is he ok?), so this has a pass.


Declan IOM - I find it hard to call this a song. I’m sorry, there’s just not much for me to grab onto. I can’t hear the lyrics, the drone doesn’t have a harmonic purpose (maybe just a textural one), and the plucking sound seems to be there just to emphasize the rhythm of the vocal line, yet isn’t consistent. Even then, there isn’t much rhythm, and I have trouble finding a pulse. All that said, I realize that you have chosen these elements as a creative choice. I just think this should be playing on a loop over an art installation at the Tate Museum of Modern art full of snowy 70s era tvs and artfully stacked chairs (this is an exhibit I saw there when i was visiting london, and that is what your song reminds me of…). For what you're going for…. You did it, and did a decent job at it, but I don't want to listen to it more than I have to. The lyrics are unnerving, but in a different way. Maybe the music is supposed to be a complement to the eeriness of the subject matter, in which case - brilliant - well done - why don’t you have a Tate exhibit yet? The lyrical intention is clear, but it is inelegant, and not super poetical. Not to say lyrics have to be poems, but it would have been nice to have something to hold on to with this song. I met the robot, so you passed the challenge. 


Dented Bento - IV is that you? Your voice sounds really great, and I love the harmonies in the chorus; they line up perfectly. I also like the eguitar and the synths together; the texture is yummy. You’ve sparked joy for me! That bass synth has a wonderful timbre, and the two synths that are in my right ear/left ear as accents in the chorus are a great contrast. As I listen again, are they actually eguitar with different pedals? Synth right, eguitar left? It’s a really cool effect. I like how you imitate that effect in the solo by hard panning (stronger in the right) the two takes with different effects. This song is so very sweet, and paints a wonderful picture. I’m a bit of a pack rat, so I will admit that Marie Kondo fills me also with anxiety (also thanks for the Ring shout out. Pretty sure I’ve got a rheingold score on my shelves packed with way too many books). All that to say, I feel for you, dented bento. And, I feel like you introduced yourself (“A lonely lunchbox with a Laptop and electric guitar”), so you fulfill the challenge for me. 


EmKayDeeBee - I like your voice a lot, especially when you have the harmonized vocals; the conversational bridge is also really effective. What I love about your voice is that it sounds purely YOU - you aren’t trying to sound like someone else, which is evident in its evenness of tone throughout your range and with different dynamics and intensities. Also your voice has just a wonderful timbre. It’s a perfect mix of head voice with connection to chest voice. Harp sounds great, too - I love the sparse orchestration of just it and hand/shaker perc. The harp really provides everything you need in the arrangement. Especially the solo. You are very good (which I’m sure you already know). I definitely met you; you pass the challenge. 


Giraffes for Wings - The orchestration is interesting. Both silly instrumentation and then at times serious, which makes me think this song is taking itself too seriously on purpose, which I like. Some of the vocals are pitchy, especially on the ‘da da da’s at the end. The last high notes are flat (or sharp? I could hear the notes on either side being correct. Choose one). It seems like you just dont have enough energy in the voice in the back half of the song. Take a deeper, quieter breath; besure to expand your lungs without over-filling; release in a steady controlled stream. This would have been higher in my rankings if your ending vocal hadn’t been lack lustre. Also, despite your grand play out, I don’t know your name. This doesn’t seem much like an introduction. 


GGS - The verse about Kyle made me giggle. Guitars seem low. Vocals a little fuzzy. How is it possible that EVERYTHING feels mixed low? The (good) guy in my right ear doing shout outs is so great and is like 74% of this song’s personality (the other 26% is Kyle jkjk I just really laughed hard at that verse). I love when you go into harmonies at the end. Challenge is fulfilled.


Governing Dynamics - Great opening. Very 80s nostalgia. I just want to thrash my head around and sing along. The reverb on the vocal is different that i usually hear, and I like it, makes this sound like a HiFidelity live recording. The lyrics do have an introduction at the very beginning, but I think it’s weak… actually, the lyrics aren’t much to write home about, but you make up for it with the quality of the music. The bass line is great too- I’m enjoying following it in the instrumental break. And I like the oo’s vocals on the break, too. 


HandHammered - The guitar is the star of this song. Beautiful tone, beautifully played, and I love the slide guitar in the background adding color. This is what I would call a palette cleanser song. The lyrics are really beautiful, and interestingly poeticized, but I don’t feel like I met you or was introduced to you. Unfortunately, you get bumped down a bunch because I just don’t see this as fulfilling the challenge. 


Hot Pink Halo - This is lovely to listen to. Probably one of your best, and certainly my favorite that I’ve heard from you. Your vocals are sounding good, very well in line with each other. I like how different instruments come in and out in the different sections. It does a great job of keeping the song interesting. The lyrics are fabulous, so vivid, so colorful, so referencing TMNT. I like the take on your stage name. You fulfilled the challenge for me. 


Hutch - Love the blues. Vocal is mixed a bit hot. I like the song, but it is not an introduction. DISQUALIFIED jk you’re a shadow. This is fun just to listen to in the background. 


Jealous Brother - I like the change up - the song until then was getting a bit repetitive, but the bridge is polyrhythmic bliss. I want the solo after to be longer! It’s. much. Too. short. Though I guess you were already six seconds past your 3:30 mark... This is a classic meet the band song, and so you pass the challenge easily. 


Jon Porobil - Love the lyrical concept. Would like a touch of reverb (not a whole lot, and not on the solo) on the vocals to match the reverb effect on your chosen synth. The way you bring in and out the chorused ‘hiiiiii Joooon’ in a doppler way is great. I especially like when you bring it in in minor, and then again bring in the effect without the vocals, like it’s a memory that snaps you out of your spiral. The music is well arranged, but the star of this song is your take on the challenge, and how you use reverse reverb to reinforce it. I think the take is brilliant, and is my favorite interpretation of the challenge. 


Keen Observer - Clever. Nice groove, driving action, and catchy too. The funky (pun intended) sound you have is a good match for the silly nature of the lyrics. It’s not like you’re cracking jokes, but hey, who doesn’t laugh at bathroom humor? (grandma I know you're giving me the stink eye but I know you giggle when no one’s around). I really like all they ways you manage to talk about poop in clever and interesting ways. Nice to meet you, Mr. Shit, it’s a pleasure. 


Lichen Throat - As always, I love the midi band behind you. It’s a series of sounds that I love, especially your drums. Your vocals are sounding really good - the melody is pretty clear, and doesn’t clash much at all. I noticed that you have a bass doubling the melody, and this is a very wise choice. I want your higher notes to have more support. You get great breath support under low lines like ‘i dug in the earth,’ but then the higher lines get off your breath and it makes them a little pitchy. I like the lyrics a lot - they are charming and funny and just dark enough to match the music. I need a t-shirt that says, “I Met the King of the Gnomes!” You pass the challenge. 


Little Bobby Tables - First of all, love the name. This song is sweet. Did you perform it live? I hear someone (a kid?) in the background, and I can’t tell if it’s intentional or not. Speaking of recording live, I can hear your electric piano’s weighted keys (they sound just like mine). I recommend bumping up the volume on your piano and put the mic farther away from the keys. I feel like I met someone at a party and had this chat, so you pass the challenge. Favorite part of the song is the counterpoint vocal harmonies on the last line. 


Lucky Witch and the Righteous Ghost - AAAAAAaaaaaaaaooooooo….. That hook! It keeps growing on me, so that I am singing along now. I love the brash confidence in your voice on it. And well sung! Dare I even hear a tad of healthy vibrato on the hellos? It’s great. I really love this song. It’s so spooky monster scary bump in the night. The lyrics are sinister, especially, which is fun because the music seems… more hopeful? there. Hello hook is so catchy, great stuff. I feel like I met Cthulu; challenge gets a pass. 


Melody Klein - Intro reminds me of the temple of time in OOT in the best way possible. The tams/drums in general are a wonderful sound. I like the vocal (synth? I assume?? I hear no breaths) harmony winding around itself. The musical progression of this song is incredible. I love the build, the drama towards the end. This piece is symphonic, and I like that a lot about it. This is a sound I could listen to all day, and love, and tickles all my videogamey fancies, but I cannot make out any of your lyrics, partially due to the mix, and partially due to the effects on the vocal. Sonically they are a great, an excellent choice, but it would take a couple years of me listening to this to ever get what the song is about. Good thing you posted the lyrics! You laid yourself bare, and that takes a lot of courage. I definitely know you better than I did before I read the lyrics, so challenge get a pass. 


Menage a Tune - Lovely tune. I like the sparse G+G arrangement. The melody is a bit repetitive for me, though. The chorus needs a bigger contrast from the verses, and maybe it also needs a bridge, maybe something with the harp in there as solo or ornamental instrument? It’s too bad it’s only in the intro. The lyrics are cute and relatable, but they seem a bit wordy. It’s like the lines are overstuffed. Part of that impression is reinforced by the fact that the beats in the voice and the guitar don’t always line up, which make this feel like ever slightly like an early draft. You def introduced yourself, challenge passed with flying colors. 


Mystery Science Creator 3000 - I like the intro, but it's a little too quiet a little too long. I would have brought the volume up in a graduated way, so that we can hear it getting closer, instead of wondering if our speakers are working. Otherwise though, I really like how you use dynamic and volume in your story telling. Speaking of storytelling, this is of the more explicitly telling-a-story-songs in the round. Problem is, I don’t feel like there is much of an introduction. I know at the end you you ‘introduce’ the new hybrid creation, so it doesn’t get a DQ, but I think the challenge element in this song is weak. Too bad! I like the song as a dramatic piece. 


Night Sky - Very TMBG to my ear. MAN I love the sax. The solo is wonderful, though I would like to hear just a touch of reverb on there. Without it, it feels a little rough; I can hear the room more than I like. Lack of reverb doesn’t bother me on the vocals for some reason, maybe because it sounds like a choice. Also LOVE the funky bass. This has a great unity of tone throughout the whole piece. (listening on different speakers, the lack of verb on the solo doesn’t bother me so much). I wanna listen to the whole album. There’s an introduction or two in the lyrics, so you get a pass on the challenge. 


Ominous Ride - You have such great moody vocals, full of attitude. As I’ve said to some others, your vocals are great because they are YOUR vocals, not trying to sound like something else or being too pressed. I love how they overlap at times; it creates a cool effect. The multitracked vocals on the chorus sometimes get a little sloppy, but I can’t help but think that that’s on purpose. It matches the feel of the rest of the song (not that the song is sloppy, just got a laissez faire feel). The lyrics are such a pump up. I want to print them out and put them on my fridge as a daily affirmation. Definitely feel like I met you - challenge pass. 


Pigfarmer Jr - Bold opening line. This is one of the few songs I hear the lyrics to on the first run (normally they don’t sink in until the fifth or sixth listen); this is a poignant tune full of heart. Your love for your art soaks through the music and lyrics. I like the vocal harmonies, but sometimes they don’t line up with the melody in a distracting kind of way. And then WOW THAT CHANGE UP. Comes out of nowhere. I like it, but wish it had a lyrical coda sung over it. This is one of my favorites from this round because of how truly genuine it feels. And yes I feel like you told me who you are (middle aged rock star!), so you pass the challenge!


rackwagon - I like the opening a lot. Then the second intro puts me in a dreamy groove. I love how all the pieces come in one at a time. On the first few listens, all I catch is WE ARE RACK WA GON. and that’s a good hook to make me remember your name. I love the brass pad after the hook, and I love the overlapping vocals on “Now you know who we are.” I do feel like you introduced yourselves, so good on ya. Did you mean to end abruptly and have five seconds of nothing on the end? If yes - interesting choice. I would have liked a different way to end. If no - always listen to your track before you submit! You weren’t in the last hour to submit, so you had time to check. 


Regis Michelena - This makes me laugh. I even looked at your song art and it gave me an additional chuckle. Accordion? Keytar? Whatever it is, it adds delight to the ridiculousness of this song. The speak singing works here for a quirky song like this, and I find myself liking it more and more. I don’t mind some of the pitchiness because it feels like just part of the style. You’ve got a lot of personality in this song, so I feel like I know you now (which was the whole point, right?). I definitely met you at a party and you were drunk but also have also heard people compare you to that regis enough times that you start into your whole self deprecating joke about it without being prompted. I am entertained, you plass the challenge for me, & thanks for clarifying which regis.


See-Man-Ski - “I’m just a man in a mid-life crisis” I love how this becomes the hook. So catchy! So self aware! So funny! And the chords under are delightfully twisty and fun, fitting the rest of the song. Your voice has so much character, so much attitude, and I really like how you bend your voice on “me” before the playout. The multiple vocals line up really well, and you pan them well. This song is short, tho. I wanted it to go somewhere farther. I feel like I met you, you pass. 


Sober - I love this, and I was like, “Why is this such a bop?” and then I realized you had sneaky vocal harmonies all the way through and boy is that surely a way to my heart. You sing beautifully, and your backing vocals are perfectly aligned with each other. Add in the banjo, which is so bubbly, and this song is delightful. I won’t be the only one to make reference to Mumford and Sons; I love this song, and I love them, so I don’t mind. Moreover, just pop informed bluegrass is what I get from this. I don’t feel like you’re introducing yourself in this song, which unfortunately will knock you down in my rankings. I do feel like I had a long half drunk conversation with you in the back room of the house party about philosophy, life, and what it all means, and didn’t realize until the next day that I never got your name, though, so you won’t be knocked down too far. 


The Dutch Widows - I like that riff - this whole song is full of early 00s goodness. I love the effects you have on the guitar solo, but the sounds of your orchestration makes a bigger and better impression than the actual solo line, which is too bad. I do think this song is well orchestrated. That crazy thing you do with chords at the very end is great! Why didn’t you do that more, or keep going exploring the idea? I feel like I have a better idea of you who are as a band so you pass this challenge for me. 


The Wizards of Vomit - It is really hard to hear your voice at all, which is too bad because the rest of the mix is really nice to listen to. I especially like that low… clicking? sound panned hard in either ear. Sounds like an old record. Part of what messes with the vocals is that the double tracks don’t line up a lot of the time.  The lyrics are tautologically lyrics. I don’t really think there’s an introduction here. You’re talking about yourself, but I don’t really think this meets the challenge. 


Vom Vorton - That solo (duet?) is my favorite part, especially the last line of it. That call and response section has a real, “Everybody in the pub join in!” vibe, which I like. The synth you use in the texture really emphasizes the 80s nostalgia element in your song. The lyrics, as I have come to expect, are fun, singable, and clever. The whole thing can be summed up in the line “I used to be an honest man/now I am a liar” and I love how you weave the sentiment throughout the song before stating it clearly. You are introducing your rebooted self, so you indeed pass the challenge. 


Yo Mammy and the Fuzznuts - What an incredible wall of sound at the start. I love how it forms into the music, stretching, bending, twisting. I kinda wish the vocals didn’t have that ‘live performance’ filter on them (or maybe you actually recorded live?). It makes it hard to make out the vocals and words. I suppose it matches the timbres in the wall of sound, but too much of a good thing, yeah? This song toes the line between music and noise for me, mainly by virtue of the amount of white noise in all the sounds you chose. It would have been really cool if you had those sounds morph into more pure* tones to create more of a contrast, showing that you were doing it on purpose, but as is it leans more and more towards noise the longer it goes on. I kinda feel like it ends abruptly, but I don’t mind that it ends when it does. I suppose you fulfilled the challenge with the spoken words at the start, but the song doesn’t have much of an introduction element to it. You pass, but your colors are not flying. 

*I say pure in terms of less distortion/white noise, not as a judgement call

ST17.1 Reviews - Micah Sommersmith

PREAMBLE:

When I launched SpinTunes 17, my first time running things, I was nervous, hoping we’d get a good turnout. When sign-ups closed with 47 acts having put their names in, I was pretty overwhelmed. When the songs started coming in, I was excited. Listening to the entire album, I’m impressed, as always, with the quality and dedication in this community. Thank you, everyone!


This challenge allowed for a variety of interpretations. Some of you took the straightforward approach, and introduced your actual self, or your band. Some of you grabbed onto the awkwardness of introducing yourself and wrote a song about that. Some of you went more abstract, or adopted a persona, staged a mini-drama, or wrote about poop. And it’s all good! Seeing the myriad ways that everyone responds to the same challenge is a big part of the fun.


As the contest administrator, I am freed from the responsibility of ranking these songs against each other. My reviews are therefore presented in submission order.


OFFICIAL ENTRIES:


Yo Mammy and the Fuzznuts - Yo Mammy and the Fuzznuts

This is a pleasant song. The lyrics are not the focus but they still hold up on examination, and the melody is compelling. I suspect that most of the things I would suggest you change were aesthetic choices that you made deliberately, but here goes anyway:

The vocals could be much louder and clearer, especially in the “la di da da” sections - the closest thing you have to a chorus - where they are almost completely buried. The slide guitar feels haphazard and is certainly not contributing to the harmony since it never centers on any particular pitch. I don’t love the washy undistorted electric guitar that provides the sonic bedrock of the song, because I don’t particularly love washy undistorted electric guitar in general.


EmKayDeeBee - Pleased to Meet You (introvert in disguise)

Fantastic groove from the harp here - solid reliable progression with just enough flair here and there to keep things interesting. It’s always a delight when someone creates a compelling and full-sounding texture out of one instrument (well, plus some bare-bones percussion). The solo section after the first chorus is excellent as well and provides welcome contrast.

The list format of the lyrics threatens to get old, but the ABABCBCB rhyme scheme helps a lot to lend coherence to what would otherwise seem like a bunch of unrelated statements. The chorus (“I am my father’s daughter…”) is a welcome change, providing an emotional grounding and expanding the scope of the song beyond “I’m complicated”. The final line “An introvert in disguise” feels anticlimactic, and specifically the word “introvert” seems clinical compared to the language of the rest of the song. I don’t have a quick fix for that, and it doesn’t derail the song as a whole - overall this is a very nice tune that I enjoyed listening to each time.


HandHammered - I Dream

A pleasant, easy-going tune accompanied by tasteful instrumentation. (I’m a big fan of slide guitar. This is not particularly useful information since I’m not ranking anyone, but there you are.) 

A somewhat oblique take on the challenge, as we don’t get much of a sense of who the narrator is, except for his dream for America… which is itself hazily defined. Whether the judges think that’s worth penalizing is up to each of them individually.

The long pauses in the middle of vocal phrases start to tire; if I’m playing this in the background it’s all good but listening consciously, I’m impatiently waiting for you to finish your sentence. And some of those sentences are pretty awkwardly worded: “The sweet rhythm of many open road lanes” for instance; not only do you unnaturally stress the initial “the”, but also the phrase “open road lanes” seems altogether wrong to me. Language is a funny thing.


Melody Klein - My Name Is Melody

Lyrically, this is as straightforward an introduction song as one could ask for: Here’s my name; here are the things I’m interested in. No complaints there! Some of the lines are quite awkwardly phrased; two that stick out especially are “ones where tiles are layed” and “Thrilling flat rides are also not to be ignored”. There’s nothing exactly wrong with them, but the phrasing is stilted and awkward. The way stressed syllables line up or don’t with the musical strong beats is also sometimes odd.

However, any criticisms of the lyrics are somewhat incidental, because the lyrics are barely intelligible when listening. In a way, that’s a strength: I can sit back and listen and not think about the odd construction of some of the lyrics, instead treating the vocal as just another element in the sonic palette. And there are some very cool sounds here. The way the song builds and evolves throughout is satisfying even if 6:18 does feel a bit excessive. I like how the vocals become more processed on the last verse, and I’d encourage you to play with more effects on the vocals throughout the song.


David G Harrington - Dave Is OK

This is an anthem! The music is suitably epic to match the lyrics about a man who won’t let life stop him. The highlight is the chorus, especially the ending: “We all know Dave / We all know Dave / And Dave is OK”. It feels somewhat ironic that after declaring victory over the struggles of life, you declare yourself simply… OK. Of course, OK has a couple distinct meanings: just fine, pretty good, nothing special… or still in good shape despite trouble. I think the latter sense is what you have in mind, but it does create a bit of dissonance.

By verses 3 and 4, the up-by-his-bootstraps message is starting to grate on me, when you boast about withstanding “Events that would have felled a weaker man”. And in verse 4 you use the words “life” and “struggle” twice each, making it feel like you’ve run out of things to say and are just repeating yourself. Without any specific details about the particular challenges that Dave has faced, it’s difficult to judge how much of this is well-earned reflection and how much is empty braggadocio. I suppose avoiding details may help listeners put themselves in Dave’s shoes and catch some inspiration.


Governing Dynamics - Don’t Count Me Out

Has this guy met Dave? Seems like they would get along! They’ve certainly got similar life philosophies. I like the central conceit of re-introducing yourself as a changed person to someone who (maybe) did you wrong, although the details are sketchy.

I’m not used to hearing this heavy sound from Governing Dynamics, but I’m here for it. The riffs are fantastic, although the solos are less so. The dueling guitar section around 3:00 in particular feels like it’s about to fall apart any moment, and not in a good way.

“You don’t have to count on me, but don’t count me out” is a great line, which is why I’m annoyed that you don’t use it consistently. It appears that you initially wrote “You don’t have to bet on me”, then realized that “You don’t have to count on me” is better, but forgot to sing it that way all the way through, and forgot to change the typed lyrics at all.


See​-​Man​-​Ski - Let Me Introduce Myself

A catchy, funky track that doesn’t overstay its welcome. The production meshes well with the melody and vocal delivery. “I’ll paint a picture”, you say, but the lyrics are short on concrete images at all. The idea - acknowledging that the image you’re presenting is fabricated - is a compelling one, but we need more to hang that on than “I live my life like I'm 23”. Likewise, the truth - “I'm just a man in a midlife crisis” - is too generic to be all that compelling, although your commitment to the vocal delivery does help.


Little Bobby Tables - I’m The One

The submission email referred to this as a first draft, but I never got a follow-up, so this is what we’ve got. Background chatter aside, this is a pleasant listen anyway. The vocal harmony is lovely, especially on such moments as the upward leap on the word “deserved”.

The theme of resentment of technologically-driven alienation is coherent but subdued, the lyrics artfully crafted enough that it doesn’t come off as preachy - until we the last verse abandons subtlety, actually employing the phrase “kids these days” and telling them to go outside. That and two clunky lyrical choices - starting two consecutive lines with “just”, and rhyming “away” with “way” - sour the ending of what is otherwise a lovely, moody and restrained piece. I still want to hear the final version.


Lucky Witch & the Righteous Ghost - Hello

The title hook is quite catchy, aided by Brookes’ confident vocal delivery, which sits in a Dolores O'Riordan/Natalie Merchant-adjacent space that I’m a fan of. The downward pitch slides at the end of each line of the verse start to grate after a few lines, and the line “If you want to summon me, well, first be forewarned” suffers from some unclear rhythmic phrasing, but overall the vocals stand out. The jump in register on the last chorus provides a good boost of energy to end the song on. The sound effect in place of the name is a cool idea, but in execution it comes off as less “shriek of unspeakable dread” and more “whale sound”.


Dented Bento - Spark Joy

A clever take on the challenge, adopting the persona of your namesake object. The judges might protest that, since the “you” you’re addressing is the lunchbox’s owner and not a stranger, you’re not really _introducing_ yourself. Since I’m not ranking anyone, I don’t need to worry about that! 

The lyrics are crafted with care and economy - already Marie Kondo’d, it seems. Though I have to ask about that Ring - is that a DVD set of the opera or… the actual magical artifact itself? If it’s the latter, we’ve got bigger problems than a little bedroom clutter.

The backing instrumentation feels pretty samey throughout, especially the utilitarian drums and the blurpy bass synth that fills any potentially empty space. More variation in the production - either thicker in the chorus or sparser in the verses - could make the transition from the verse to the chorus feel like a bigger moment.

Your vocals mostly sit in a comfortable place, and your delivery is confident and solid. You lose control just a bit at the end of the bridge on the line “Laptop and electric guitar”.


Dutch Widows - Theme For The Dutch Widows

This is one of a few entries that went with the straightforward approach, with a song you might play to open your live set - and I hope you do because it’s a good one. The guitar riff is infectious and the jerky rhythm of the vocal on the verses keeps my attention.

The lyrics themselves feel pretty utilitarian - not particularly poetic and not particularly clever, but they work reasonably well as a vehicle for delivering the jam. The way you phrase “Dutch Widows” is very awkward: putting the stress on the second syllable of “Widows” sounds extremely unnatural. I’d recommend cutting the word “and” after “Widows” and shifting that word over an eighth note so that the natural stress lines up with the on-beat, like so:

rather than what you currently have, which is this:


The Wizards of Vomit - The Thing About Me Is, Who I Am

This song goes by pleasantly enough, but falls into the trap of thinking a clever concept is enough to carry a song on its own. It’s inspired by Perd Hapley, but lacks Perd’s good-natured weirdness, so instead the joke earns an initial chuckle and not much more. I did enjoy “The day I was born, is the date of my birth, / It’s also the date of my birth… day.” The muffled vocals are an odd choice - I assume it is a choice because the guitars sound nicely crisp and well-mixed, so I’m not sure what prompted you to bury your voice.


Boy on the Wall (featuring Parle G Baby) - Pleasure To Meet You (I Am Your Husband)

Adorable! I love this playful take on the idea of re-introducing yourself in your new role as husband. It’s some seriously questionable pronunciation that lets “new man” rhyme with “husband” but I’m gonna let it slide because it’s fun. And the great concept is supported by specific details in the verse lyrics.

The production is solid and feels faithful to the style you’re emulating, but I’m hankering for more of a lead instrument especially as there are some big gaps between vocal lines with not a lot happening. I think your vocal could also be brought forward in the mix; it feels a bit buried, especially as it's in a higher, thinner register. As a result some of the lyrics don’t come through very clearly; I’m glad to have them written out to follow along.

The rap verse is delightful as well; it maybe could have benefited from a couple extra passes to tighten up the rhythm but it’s a minor complaint.


Sober - Even If It’s Dirt

I don’t know if you’re into hugs, but I want to give you a big one. This is a great and heartbreaking song. I hope this is not your current mindset, but there’s definitely value in naming these feelings and making them explicit.

The instrumentation is excellent; I’m a sucker for a good banjo lick and it does well to drive the song forward. I want so badly to hear a chucka-chucka fiddle in there too. I’d love the slide guitar to feature more prominently, perhaps with some more intricate playing. But overall this is in a sound-world that I’m a big fan of and you do it well.

A small suggestion would be to end switch the order of the last chorus to “There's a peace that comes from knowing your worth / Even if it hurts / There's a freedom that comes from knowing your worth / Even if it's dirt” - or else repeating the first half again, so that you can end on the title hook “Even if it’s dirt”. It’s effective the way it is, but I think switching it can drive home that central line even stronger by putting it at the end.


rackwagon - We Are Rackwagon

This song comes in distinct sections that don’t feel particularly well integrated. The subdued acoustic first section is truely lovely. The gradually building electronic instrumental keeps my interest, and then… the vocals come back in and most of the goodwill you’ve accrued is gone. First it’s the same lyrics again but chanted instead of sung, and then it's a new verse with none of the enigmatic poetry of the first (and with some truly atrocious scansion on “much beloved Kransky”). Then there’s another shift into the “Now you know” section. At least you’re singing again! The overlapping and echoing vocal lines are pretty cool actually. But on the whole it feels like you jammed together a bunch of ideas that didn’t necessarily need to be in the same song.


Buku Chauney - About Me

An artful dodge here - after all, saying that you don’t want to talk about yourself is, indeed, saying something about yourself, and I enjoy that you throw out your PIN number as if to say, “You want to know specific details about me? Here you go - about as specific as you can get.”

The muddy production and slightly nasal vocals hurt the replay value a bit, but the short runtime works in your favor, as do a few really excellent chord changes, including underneath “ooh, my pin numbers 252”. So far I haven’t skipped this one when it’s come up - I’m more than happy to give it 1:31 of my time.


Vom Vorton - Forget All You Knew

This is my favorite Vom Vorton song I’ve heard in quite a while - the bouncy power pop instrumentation complements the lyrical bravado perfectly. Smart move to have the tip of the hand at the end of the chorus reinforced in the bridge. When you’re writing a song with a layer of irony like this, it’s always a delicate balancing act knowing how much to spell out explicitly and how much to count on the listener to be paying attention. I think you’ve got it right with this one.

The group vocals in the chorus work well with the full instrumentation, but feel listless and low-energy in the stripped-down chorus near the end.


Lichen Throat - King of the Gnomes

“I’m known for my mirth”, the King of the Gnomes proclaims… and then he proceeds to threaten bodily harm on anyone who makes fun of him… and THEN he tells us not to get mad when HE makes fun of US! The King of the Gnomes can dish it out but can’t take it.

Otherwise, this song doesn’t offer any particularly deep insights or gut-busting humor; it’s just a cool song about a gnome, featuring classic Lichen Throat instrumental counterpoint.


Declan IOM - I Am A Robot

I love the central concept here of a robot gaining sentience and reacting with revulsion to how it has been treated. The lyrics pull off this gradual shift really well, with subtle changes that keep the form of each verse consistent while changing the tone. I particularly like the sequence of “What is it you / Wanna do to me?” to “What is it you / Wanna do with me?” to “What is it you /

Have done to me?”

Unfortunately, the music does not live up to the promise of the lyrics: the tuneless chanting vocal and blippy bloopy instrumentation doesn’t evolve or grow at all throughout the song. You had the opportunity to support the progression of the lyrics through any number of musical techniques: instrumentation, vocal effects, melody or delivery, tempo, something! The monotony of the music really drags this one down for me.


Regis Michelena - The Other Regis

This is definitely good for a smile! I’ll always give credit for a rigorously maintained rhyme scheme, and your AABCCB verses deliver the goods, even if some of the rhymes themselves are a little dodgy (antelope / radio; Ulysses / fishies). The IMDB line made me laugh out loud, but otherwise the specific content of the verses seems more likely to appeal to those who know you personally. I’m sure there’s a hilarious story behind “I’ll steal your tiger just for fun”, for example, but it means nothing to me.

The chorus, though, is memorable in its simplicity. Play this live and you’ll have them singing along by the second chorus, no problem. The backing instrumentation is nothing special; since the solo proved you’ve got decent accordion chops, I want to hear that as the lead/rhythm instrument throughout.


Good Guy Sôjàbé - Hey Sôjàbé!

I think this is my favorite of the straightforward “let’s meet the band” songs. It’s playful without sacrificing your trademark sonic edge. The vocal interjections go a long way toward making the song fun.

The verses definitely could use some more intricate wordplay - we’ve got end rhymes and not much else, although I do love some lines like “Eight beers later nearly finished one song / Then we panic when we see it’s less than 2 minutes long”.

Does the extended “G! G! S!” section go on for too long? Yes, yes it does. I don’t think this song really needs to be 3:48 long. But it’s still a barrel of fun.


Cavedwellers - Disjointed but with Porpoise

First, a request, and this is really to everyone but I’m singling you out because I noticed it the most in your song: before you submit, listen to your song while reading your typed lyrics. Then, edit the lyrics so that they actually match what you’re singing. I’m not going to do it for you, and I don’t like having to guess as to what the “official” lyrics are supposed to be. Thanks.

That out of the way, this is classic Cavedwellers goodness. I started out trying to tap out the beat in the chorus, and then gave up and just decided to enjoy that sweet sweet asymmetrical groove. The production is impeccable, and both glennny’s guitar and Truth’s voice are in fine form as usual - though I was expecting some more virtuosic guitar playing; the brief solo before the last chorus is a bit of an anticlimax.

Lyrically, you do a good job of laying out your anti-pop, pro-oblique-complexity mission statement in an appropriately oblique way. It’s not for everyone (in fact it’s not always for me), but you know your stuff and you do it well.


Jealous Brother - We’re Jealous Brother

Another entry with no higher ambition than to introduce you to the band - which is exactly what we asked for, so I won’t complain!

I like the laid-back country-rock groove. The chorus title hook is memorable and I love that you plug your own music online. I find the fiddle a lot more interesting than the electric guitars, so I wish it featured more prominently. The bridge is cool with its interlocking vocals, but I’m not sure it warrants being repeated four times. The transition from the bridge to the solo is also surprisingly limp - the drum hit that I’m expecting to be the start of a fill leading into the solo is in fact the downbeat of the solo section, which I find disorienting every time. That may be a dumb nit to pick, but there it is.


Hot Pink Halo - Hot Pink Halo

Damn it, this is a good song. I’ll always appreciate a song that makes me interested in things I had no real knowledge before, and I had to restrain myself from diving too far into pigment message boards. Obviously as a visual artist you are attuned to the details of your craft, and aspects of it that go completely over others’ heads are precious (even sacred?) to you. But what’s really impressive is that you’ve managed to convey that feeling in an entirely different art form - two, if you count music and lyrics, which work together brilliantly here - and that you’ve extracted what feel like universal truths from the extreme specificity of your subject matter.

The only complaints I have about this song are related to the recording, the mix and to some rhythmic irregularities, but honestly who cares. Instead of picking those nits, I’m going to list some of the details I love about this song:

The Regina Spektor DGAF stuttered melismas on fight/flight/bright

The stealth Ninja Turtles references

The way the word “halo” ends the first chorus but later is used as the jumping-off point for the ACTUAL chorus

The way lines are subtly altered between sections, e.g. “Isn’t all that’s there” / “isn’t always there”

“A shape shifting shadow showing something that’s true”

Honestly, this is the best kind of song: the kind that makes me angry, because as a fellow songwriter I know that you’re at a level I can’t reach.


Keen Observer - P.O.S.

People sometimes think they can come up with a clever novelty concept and the hard work is done. But you deliver on the execution here: Catchy chorus hook, catchy guitar riff. Vocals in fine form, lyrics crafted with care. In and out in 2 and a half minutes, just like a good trip to the bathroom.


Giraffes for Wings - Screed of the Toothpick Man

A song this hyper-specific can be easy to dismiss as a throwaway joke, but you’ve made both lyrical and musical choices so carefully that this song, like its protagonist, demands to be taken seriously.

This song reminds me of novelist Liane Moriarty’s knack for blowing up small-town grievances into epic proportions, culminating in mundane social events imbued with enormous portent (in Big Little Lies, it’s the Elvis- and Audrey- themed costume contest and trivia night; here it’s the hog roast/opening church softball league game). What she does in several hundred pages, you’ve managed to pull off in a minute and a half, aided by excellent musical choices such as the triplet-strummed guitar and the anthemic group vocals at the climax.

I know this Toothpick Man; I know him and I do not like him. Nobody likes him. But we must be cordial to him, because after three pork sandwiches at the softball game we’re all gonna need a toothpick.


The Brewhouse Sessions - I Am Beer

It seems you’ve succeeded admirably in distilling (ha!) the essence of the Brewhouse Sessions into a single song - an easy-going, laid-back tune that teaches me more about beer than I ever knew I didn’t know. The vocals are confident, the instrument are competent, and on the whole it goes down easy in a way that (in my experience) most beer doesn’t. That said, it gets to be a bit of a slog at 4:33, with verse after verse of brewing details, a very long chorus, and not a ton of variation.


Boffo Yux Dudes - Half Step Away

The first thing that sticks out to me is the persistently awkward vocal phrasing, with the wrong syllables emphasized all over the place. “Slumming” and “constantly” are just a few examples from early in the song; I gave up trying to catalog them all. The second thing is that, for all the mentions of making jokes and puns, there… aren’t actually any jokes or puns. The difference between a song with a jokey premise and an actually successful comedy song is all in the execution.

There are some nice production touches but the thuddy drums and long pauses between vocal lines lend a monotonous air to the whole thing. The choruses are a lot more successful than the verses - in particular the warbly auto-tune on “Duuuuuudes” etc. If the whole song had committed to that same level of extravagance, I think you’d have something a lot more interesting.


Night Sky - Celestial Navigation

Those saxophones are gorgeous! It’s one thing to lay down a tasty sax solo over a more conventional rock backing instrumentation, but here you’ve layered them all over the song, and the way the multi-tracked sax parts work together is fantastic, including the contrast between the growly staccato bari that opens the song and the smooth smooth alto harmony elsewhere.

The lyrics deal with big important ideas, but feel a bit clinical and detached - exacerbated by the vocal delivery, which is definitely competent but doesn’t have much emotion behind it. I feel like there’s a disconnect between the music and the lyrics. It’s all extremely well-done, but lacks a sense of cohesion.


Mystery Science Creator 3000 - Awakenings

Suitably epic sound for a mini-space opera. The vocals for both the astronaut and the AI are quite well done; the green smurf veers a bit too far into silly territory for my taste.

I’m a little unclear on how the astronaut and AI actually merge, and how that fends off the parasite, but I don’t actually care. It’s a fun story and an enjoyable listen.


Menage a Tune - Mostly I’m Just Me

This is a fun, lighthearted tune, which makes an interesting point: we can list our many experiences, interests or accomplishments, but they’re not really who we are. Mostly I’m just me!

The lyrics are generally well-constructed, although in some lines the number of syllables doesn’t quite come out right, or stress gets put in an odd place, like in the line “Sometimes I’m a face painting clown” where the word “a” gets the primary stress.

Musically, the melody is good but the timing hasn’t quite been worked out between the singer and the guitarist. A few more run-throughs (and a click track) could have tightened things up considerably.

My favorite thing about this song is hearing the smile in your voice on the choruses!


Jon Porobil - My Name Is Jon

A strong, compelling, honest song here. Great lyrics which thread the needle of backing up declarations of emotion with specific concrete details - a balance not every song in this round has struck successfully.

A strong vocal performance, though with a few odd choices. I don’t think the octave jump in the second verse works - because it’s in your light falsetto range, it’s not actually a boost of energy. You make plenty of vocal delivery choices that do work, however - the bridge into the third verse into the last chorus are a roller coaster ride, and your voice does a lot of the heavy lifting. In the final chorus, the passion and angst in the lyrics and in your vocal performance are not supported by the instrumental, which continues on its merry boppity boppity way. It’s a very odd juxtaposition that I don’t think serves the song. In general from the instrumental I want more power, less pop.


Pigfarmer Jr - Middle Age Rock Star

Solid concept, and the reveal is nicely executed. The lead vocal is quite well done - it’s high in your range which gives it some good energy, but it’s also very well controlled. The lower backing vocal in the chorus is less well done - it doesn’t quite line up with the lead, especially on the lines “Singing words I misheard / Being a rock star in my mind” and it doesn’t really add much to the song - I’d rather you rely on the instrumentation to provide the energy boost for the chorus.

I’m not a huge fan of the instrumental coda - it feels like an afterthought. I’d rather have a solo section integrated in the main body of the song for you to display your rock star guitar chops.


Also In Blue - Pleasure To Meet You

Holy moley - this song right here, folks. The lyrics are direct and heartfelt, and the arrangement is complex but restrained (that piano! it fills in the time between the vocal lines perfectly). The vocal harmony is pitch-perfect. The lead vocal is sensitive and soulful but blossoms on the bridge leading into the “I’m looking away” section.

Here’s my one piece of criticism: In the words “conversation” and “overthinking” in their respective choruses, the final syllable gets practically dropped. In the latter case, the lead vocal sounds like “overthink” but the backing vocal preserves the “-ing” final syllable, giving an odd effect like the volume knob got yanked down just for that tiny moment. That’s it; that’s my critique. Man, what a song.


Ominous Ride - The Guy Behind the Guy

An excellent song to close out the official entries. Epic in all the best ways. Thick riffs, strong vocals, and lyrics that sound awesome even if they don’t seem to add up to anything definitive. (Who is this guy really? God? The devil? No, because he “burns the devil’s soul”. A… drug of some kind? And who is the guy he’s behind?? These are the questions I would be asking if I weren’t distracted by the general awesomeness of this song.)

Here’s a sort-of criticism: The woo-oo-oo intro feels like a throwaway novelty since it doesn’t reappear anywhere else in the song. Oh and one more: I don’t love the distortion tone on the solo starting at 2:36. Neither of these complaints comes even close to ruining this great song.


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Hutch - Mountain Home Blues

Nice simple blues which could certainly benefit from a full band, or at least a lead instrument to add some variety. Seems like the particular blues in the first three verses aren’t really blues at all - unless the breakup, revealed in the second half of the song, is lingering over all the seemingly positive feelings in the first half. Interesting.


All the Robots - All the Robots

This is me and Ryan (erstwhile of Jerkatorium). I wrote the song and sent it off to him with the general direction to make it more robot-y as it went along. I’m obsessed with circular verse forms with interlocking stanzas, so this was my excuse to indulge in that. I’m a big fan of the effects Ryan overlaid onto my voice.